Loveless, listless me.
Sitting near the blue stream
Forever waiting.
~~~***~~~
A senryu is a three line Japanese poem structurally similar to haiku. It is unrhymed and the subject is based on human nature. it too has three lines of verses consisting of five, seven and five syllables respectively.
PS. It is my very first attempt. :)
*pic: deviantART
nah, the wait wont be for ever preeti...!! :)
ReplyDeletevery nice piece...!! :)
great first attempt!! :)
So very Preetilata-esque.
ReplyDeleteGo on with this Poetic spree...
:)
A poetic spree going on,ha?..
ReplyDeleteGood stuff!
i like the picture as well..
human nature? hehe then i shud try this :D
ReplyDeletelines suit the pic so well moti :)
wow, whatever you write, you are the best in it! Great work, sweetheart, so very you... could not expect anything less from you!!
ReplyDeleteAmazing
ReplyDelete:)
So few words. Yet so very well do they portray
The true intent
:)
You really don't have to be so sorry that you missed my posts dear.
ReplyDelete:)
I'm at fault too.
Mine though is a different problem.
:(
I've got 56 Blogs in my Blogroll, and I've not yet been able to visit everyones updates!
Everytime I've visited once, Bfore i visit the rest, the former Blog gets updated.
Sigh. A task impossible.
:(
Do forgive me if i forget to visit your Blog.
:)
Better yet, remind me Wenever you post
:)
Thankyou
:)
And i forget to say this everytime
ReplyDeleteI loved ur template
:)
Awesome combo of design and beauty.
Ofcourse, that was expected, as Lena designed it
:)
your first attempt?? really nice:)
ReplyDelete@vinay,
ReplyDeletehope so :p
thanks :)
@indrajit,
ReplyDelete:) lol
thanks :)
@aayu,
ReplyDeleteyeh dear.
thanks :)
@divz,
ReplyDeleteyep human nature. so that dsnt suit u at all :p
thnks chimponks :D
@lena,
ReplyDeletethanks sweetheart. i knw i am d best. but u r d bestest :p
thanks janu...for d belief in me.
@sid,
ReplyDeletethanks dear :)
@sid,
ReplyDeletehehehe..no need to say sorry. i cn undrstnd wat wud hppn with 56 blogs in a blogroll :p
will remind u from nxt time.
ps. u missed my last post. so do read it asap :p
@template... lena is A genious :) n me too is ;) i made this templt indirectly coz we r soul sis so credit goes to me too :p ;) :D
@swyt butterfly,
ReplyDeleteyes my 1st attempt dear.
thanks a lot :)
stunning piece of work!
ReplyDeleteI am learning a lot from you now, haiku, senryu, nonnet, and I wonder what's coming next!
oh my God... you know wat this is gonna do now... you are gonna see a string of Senryu's... :)
ReplyDeleteand you know well who will be there... LOL...
beautiful one mate... and thanks again for another introducing me to a new style :)
cheers...
.....dreams and expectations ....all abandoned on a piece of paper...
ReplyDeletewawwwwwwwwwww........
OMG.. Preeti.. u sure r da Queen of these structured poems,, right frm Nonnets to Haiku to now tis.. :-)
ReplyDeletelovely lines.. :-) hope da wait ends soon.. :-)
beautiful dear..:)...well i dont want to attempt anymore poems...i am afraid to break rules :)....
ReplyDeleteurs..hemu..
Great attempt!:)The first attempt gives a solid glimpse of the compositions to come..:)
ReplyDeletecooooool preeti
ReplyDeletewow....!!!
ReplyDeletehow do ever write so beautifully dear????
lovely....!!!
see i dint know what haiku was and dint understand it even now.
ReplyDeletebut your 3 lines and 5+7+5 syllables were mind blowing
@ farah,
ReplyDeletethanks a lot dear :)
many more new things are on the way though even i don't know what they are or will be :D
@arv,
ReplyDeletehehehe thanks mate. i really wud be very happy to see senryu becoming a hit just like the nonet :D
so very glad that u liked it and r gonna write one soon
n yes mm waiting for ur senryu. u also have to do a haiku. so do it asap.
take care :)
@olimpia,
ReplyDeletethanks a lot mama
love u :)
@muzer,
ReplyDeletehehehe so sweet of u dear. i happily accpt the 'queen' title :p lol
thanks a lot. :) glad that u loved it :)
@hemz,
ReplyDeletethank you hemu.
well i dont think just becoz u broke the rule once u sudnt try writting agn. we all are here to learn.
@ mithe,
ReplyDeletethanks mithe. glad u liked it. :)
@farah,
ReplyDeletethanks dear :)
@yamini,
ReplyDeletethanks yamu. :)
u too are a lovely poet. aren't u? ..lol :)
@kunal,
ReplyDeletewelcome here.
thanks a ton :)
if i ever start up a professional website which deals with literature then i am gona need you for all the content and Lena for the template :P
ReplyDeleteif i decide to publish a book, i wud again approach you for content and Lena for design :P
you sure prove to be mastering the language :P
tats a superb attempt re
ReplyDeleteand u rock
:)
Cute.....
ReplyDeletetum badi hoke ek badi poet banogi :P
a heart fullllllllll of yearning in just 3 lines
ReplyDeletesimple superb :)
Never heard of a Senryu before,thanks for that piece of knowledge angel!
ReplyDeleteAs for your first attempt at it,what else can be expected from a born writer?Lovely one :)
Keep up the great work sweetypie!Love you loads.Muaaaaaaaaah
*HUGS*
@anil,
ReplyDeletei am honored dear. thanks a lot.
chalo now start something soon so that i and lena can utilize our creativity. :p
@priya.
ReplyDeletethanks a lot dear. even you rock sweets :)
@sourish,
ReplyDeletethank you so very much.
i wish tumhari ye baat sach ho jay sourish da. :)
@shal,
ReplyDeletethank you shal. :)
when are you gonna update your blog?
@ sameera,
ReplyDeleteeven i dint know it before. came to know it while surfing abt haiku. :p
thank you angel. thanks for every support and unlimited love of urs.
love u too my dadimum angel. umahhhhhhhhh :)